06 May 2009

Controversy!

As you can see, yesterday's word was pretend. I'd originally posted it under the title family, as one reader (Robert) noticed. At the last minute, however, I pulled it and reworked it slightly, but Google had already cached it here. Anyway, I'd be interested to know which version you think works better... Use the poll to the right if you want to express your important opinion on this stunningly relevant issue!

27 comments:

joseph said...

I'm not sure whether I can ever trust you again.

Isaac Yassar said...

The "family" has stronger punchline, I think.

Lockwood said...

I didn't really get "family," because the presence of the policeman wasn't of obvious import to me. "Pretend" worked better because the policeman was explicitly drawn into the joke.

Diane said...

i cant decide! omg the pressure!!!!!!!!!!

Diane said...

ok lockwood pushed me to one side of the fence with that observation. i'm gonna go with 'pretend'. voting now!

Sarah said...

I like "family"

EmperorNero said...

I enjoyed both, but I think "pretend" is stronger because it includes the policeman, and he is a key part of the picture. "family" while funny, isn't as morbidly funny as "pretend."

Molly Gaudry said...

I loved "family" when you posted it, but I failed to notice the policeman. "pretend" incorporated the policeman quite well, I think. A blending, then?

John Jr. said...

Well, it appears I'm currently within the vast minority, but indeed the family version had a subtler (begetting a stronger) punchline. I do like the addition of the sinister "It will be a little game," however.
Were it up to me, I wouldn't eliminate one or the other, but allow them to coexist: two slightly varying perspectives of the same scene.
It can be a Cinco de Mayo special.
It will be a little game.

CCP said...

i like the "pretend" version

farukahmet said...

Definitely "Family". Whole point of the joke is that they are pretending; so using that word is kind of a spoiler. "Family" has innuendo, which is your sense of humor is based upon. "Pretend" on the other hand, is too conspicuous.

weenie_elise said...

i like pretend

Leslie P. Polzer said...

I agree that pretend is too obvious but I like it way better nevertheless. :)

GĂ©raldine said...

I prefer the family version ^^

Scaryduck said...

FamilySo mote it be

Coyote said...

I prefer Family, but it was not explicit enough, as Pretend was.

Meagan said...

I prefer the Family one. It took me a second to figure it out, thus it was even funnier! With Pretend, I think it's too obvious and loses the comedic beat that makes Family funny. Perhaps the Police officer could be made larger or more saturated maybe, to draw more attention to it.

Jonathan said...

Family would have been the better of the two had the policeman been more prominent to better establish the context. As it stands, I think your revision is more effective.

Robert Seddon said...

Probably the revised one, since the 'father, a mother, a brother and two sisters' bit was slightly cumbersome.

(By the way, Google's cache will probably let the page go after a while, but I see the image is still stored here.)

TylerTotten said...

I much preferred "pretend." It emphasizes, in my opinion, the fact that something subtly sinister is going on that slips past the children's cognition is quite morbidly funny. They don't understand the gravity of what they're pretending to do. To them, "pretend" is still aligned with the make-believe playtime ritual as opposed to this possible child abduction that they're caught up in.

Steven said...

I'd have to go with "pretend." The last line is wonderful.

Ross Horsley said...

I'm a little stunned that over 800 people have voted in this poll already! Thanks for all these insightful comments. They help me understand what people think "works" about My First Dictionary -- e.g. how subtle or sinister to be, whether or not to go for a punchline, etc.

Niv Bavarsky said...

Family was stronger, I think. More subtle, which made it creepier.

theotherkid said...

I like the "pretend" version better. I think it is a bit darker and I like that.

coffee said...

I definitely preferred the Family version also because of the subtlety.

peterconiglio said...

Pretend! You can use "family" for a new one, I think.

Ronsonic said...

As much as I appreciate the warm glow of a sick thought slowly coming into focus, I'll have to go with the more obvious one in this case.

"Pretend" has more comedic impact and fits the scenario better.

You'll find something really warped for "Family" I am sure.

My verification word was "warden"